Just a little something soft after a week of rough and tumble. This is not my natural choice of poem, so if you do not like the result, Mantra is 100% to blame. Well, not entirely. The memory is mine. The sonnet is hers.
It should be absolutely no surprise I completely lack skills which conform to stringent rules and demands such as those which govern the more classic types of poetry. Even those which are predominantly populated with whimsy, as are haiku and limericks, I am cursed with a verbosity which does not mesh within the constraints of rigid meter, word and stanza limits and/or prescription creativity. The short form: I am better at odes.
Every once in a while, I to listen to Mantra gripe about more staid versions of poetry which I am denying her. To alleviate the gritching, I give you an attempt at a sonnet. I hope you like it.
Summer Slumber
The fireflies look like a meteor shower
Beneath the boughs of the weeping willow.
They circle ’round in twirling eddies
While the half moon above the trees hangs low.
A breeze gently caresses the lemon grass
And chocolate verbena, smelling sweet.
The crisp nighttime air refreshes the skin
In soothing respite from late summer heat.
Tonight, one last dip in the chilly spring
Before we call off the day as complete.
Cares wash away in rippling tumbleweeds,
Falling from minds now orderly and neat.
Bedding down in the thicket, safe and content,
‘Neath fireflies’ lights and darkness intent.
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(c) Ann Marie Dwyer 2012
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Androgoth
/ March 30, 2012A most delightful poem Red, you know when a poet writes, the words flow into each other gently rubbing the edges and as each surface is polished so too are the words that are spoken within the lines of genius…
I think that you could write anything that you set your mind to and this poem of yours is a testament to this finding…
Have a lovely evening and a
delightful start to your weekend Red 🙂
Androgoth XXx
Red
/ March 30, 2012You are a shameless flatterer, Andro. But thank you all the same. I hope your weekend has started wondrously 😉 Do try and behave a mite. And barring that, at least be wickedly good at it!
Androgoth
/ March 30, 2012Hey Red I meant every word, you are a fine writer and there are no limits when one writes as fluently as yourself, I do not jest…
And I am always good, well only when I am not being too wicked that is 🙂
Androgoth XXx
angela
/ March 30, 2012Awesome:)
Red
/ March 30, 2012Glad you liked it. I thought it was pretty when it was all said and done.
Tony McGurk
/ March 30, 2012You have a real knack for composing beautiful poetry. That willow photo is amazing. Did you take that one yourself?
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Red
/ March 30, 2012No, it is a stock photo. I had to hunt for it…the good ones are always on the bottom of the pile.
Binky
/ March 30, 2012That was really quite nice. Despite the lack of badgers. Or wombats.
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Bear
/ March 30, 2012Very soft and warm… I like it a lot!
Red
/ March 31, 2012Thank you, Bear.
MJ Logan
/ March 31, 2012Rules smules, right with the write side of your brain and make the words sing.
I like it.
MJ
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Red
/ March 31, 2012Mantra has a 10,000 square foot palace in the right side of my brain. She does not often make it to the west wing. Makes this one quite a bit of an anomaly. Glad you liked this one, MJ.
valentinelogar
/ March 31, 2012This reminds me of a place by my parents house we use to go and sit. It was a great memory. Thank you.
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Red
/ March 31, 2012You are so very welcome. I am glad you like it.
Christy Birmingham
/ March 31, 2012I like the idea of cares washing away in tumbleweeds. My poetry also does not conform to traditional structure of classic poetry – not to worry, it is the flow and the message that are most important!
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Red
/ March 31, 2012You, above all, understand the need to abandon the conventions on occasion to get the message across. I rather like tumbleweeds. They have grown in symbolism, yet remain very simplistic. It makes them a versatile vehicle for many things in which to tumble away. Good to see you today, Christy!
spilledinkguy
/ March 31, 2012Wowza! Nicely done, Red!
I’ve yet to compose a poem where I wasn’t looking for that ‘certain something’ that also just happened to rhyme with ‘blue’…
🙂
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Red
/ March 31, 2012*Giggles* Thank you, SIG. You do better than you think 😉
Raymond Alexander Kukkee
/ April 1, 2012Who needs rhyme and meter? This is written with natural polish, Red, and this is truly elegant.
You are a far better poet than you allow yourself to believe, my friend, –even if this is April 1st.
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Red
/ April 1, 2012Thank you, Ray. I am working on it. I tend to let Mantra do as she pleases. The results are always better. Angie would tell me Imma is in charge, since Gram is in charge on all the other posts…it is a fair trade off. Are you doing A to Z this year?
Raymond Alexander Kukkee
/ April 1, 2012Red, I think Mantra is doing a fine job whether Imma is in charge or Gram takes control. You write beautiful poetry, seriously. Your reference to ‘doing A to Z” is referring to ?? “?: )
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Red
/ April 1, 2012The “Blogging A to Z Challenge April 2012”: 30 days to write 26 posts. A different letter everyday. See the badge at the top right, under the million word meter? Check out there or the link from “A is for Adversarial”.